Personally, I cannot imagine living in one of these wars. Especially after looking all the videos which we were recommended to watch, such as the "Saving Private Ryan - Omaha Beach Part 1", all that you actually want to do is just break down and cry. The videos are not only superbly saddening, but superbly disgusting as well. Looking at the guy pick up his own bloody hand which is detached from his body? That's... just disgusting. Here's my assignment for imaging myself being in one of the wars:
Crouching in the shadows, running away in the dark, having German soldiers trailing you like dogs. At every single point of day, every single minute and every single second, my family hid in our secret home which was located inside an office. The bookshelf the only way into our private and hidden home. German soldiers were outside every day, breaking into homes and dragging them out, taking them to places which were never spoken of. Those Jews were never seen again. Living in a fear of being caught, living in a fear of death, that traumatises the entire life of a child as young as me, forever. But will I even survive?
Hi Raphael,
ReplyDeleteI think this diary entry is quite a good piece of writing and I sensed that you really placed yourself in the soldier's shoes, as you were able to point out some of the feelings and thoughts that a soldier in a war would have. I like the way you started, explaining about the situation of the war and how it seems never ending. I also like your point about the bookshelf being the only way back into private life. You also epitomized the sense of fear that a soldier would have. However, I think that you could have explained more about your thoughts on war and perhaps recount the day's events to make it seem more like a diary entry. Another idea is to create some grammatical and/or spelling errors to create the authentic effect that the soldier cannot think straight at that point and shows the state of confusion of his mind. All in all, a good job on your first attempt!
Nathanael